The graph below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following illustrations depict the percentages of
films
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released and cinema ticket sales in a
ceratin
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certain
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country, in 1996 and 2006. The genres of
films
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are
drama
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,
comedy
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,
fantasy
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and
romance
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.
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, we can observe that the majority of
people
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liked
comedy
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films
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more in both years,
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however
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the highest number of
films
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produced was
drama
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.
On the other hand
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, the least popular
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genre
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genres
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of
musi
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music
in 1996 and 2006
was
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were
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fantasy
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and
romance
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, respectively.
According to
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the first bar graph, in 1996,
the
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a
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quarter of
films
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produced was
drama
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, 20% of produced movies
was
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were
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comedy
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comedies
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, approximately 15% of
films
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was
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were
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fantasy
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and the least popular kind of
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films
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film
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was
romance
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. In 2006, the production of all kinds of movies
has
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slightly increased except
of
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for
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romance
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.The production of
drama
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films
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have
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has
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increased by 10% and made up 35% of all produced movies. 25% of
films
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was
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were
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comedy
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, and 15% of
films
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was
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were
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fantasy
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.
Although
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, the number of
romance
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films
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stayed the same. Around 15% of sold
tickets
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were
drama
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,
this
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number
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slightly increased in 2006 and made up around 13% of
films
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. 20% of sold
tickets
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were in
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genre
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the genre
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of
comedy
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, in 1996. There were
any
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no
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substantial differences in
this
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genre
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, too just a slight increase. The least popular kind of movie in 1996 was
fantasy
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which made up less
that
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than
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5% of sold
tickets
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, unlike
to
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in
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2006
where
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when
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more than 5% of
tickets
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were
fantasy
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.
Romance
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was the least popular kind of movie among
people
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, around 3% of
people
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bought
tickets
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for
this
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genre
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. And 5% of
people
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bought
tickets
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of
this
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genre
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, in 1996.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, drama, comedy, fantasy, romance, people, genre, tickets with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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