The chart below shows the percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities , and towns, and Ural areas in 1950 and 2010. Summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities , and towns, and Ural areas in 1950 and 2010. Summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparison where relevant.
The bar graphs give information about the
amount
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of born people throughout
Australia
from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the percentage of being born in the
cities
of
Australia
showed
similar
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a similar
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rising trend in both given
period
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periods
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,
while
2010 witnessed the smallest. In 1950, More babies were born in all selected places, namely,
cities
, towns and rural places of
Australia
than
2010
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in 2010
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. That of
cities
inside of
Australia
was about at 50% in 1950 and other figures: towns and the countries had 20% and nearly
30%respectively
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30 %respectively
,
while
that year more people had babies outside of that. the year 2010 was
dominant
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a dominant
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year for the trend of being born in
cities
of the
country's
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country
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inside and outside,
however
, there was a decrease in
born
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the born
a born
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schedule in towns and
suburbans
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suburbs
.
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