Topic: The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed.

Topic: The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed.
The supplied tables and charts demonstrate how the police
budget’s
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money was spent in one area of
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England
during
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2017 to 2018. The table illustrates where the money
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came from
three
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in three
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sections and the chart
indicate
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the process of its
distributing
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.
Overall
; the percentage of salaries was nearly the same,
while
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of
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technology
has been
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increased in 2018.
It is clear that
; the part of the third one has not changed.
According to
the pie charts; the income of officers and staff
were
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75 per cent and it has been decreased to 69 in 2018.
In addition
; 8 per cent of
money
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was spent
for
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technology in the first year which
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went
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up to 14 in 2018;
while
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of
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building and transport was equal. The budget of national government and local taxes were respectively 175.5 and 91.2 million in 2017 which had a relative increase and reached
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177.8 and 102.3 million.
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section
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of other sources had just a little increase from 38 to 38.5 million. Needless to say
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; the total of resources had been rose during these years from 304.7 to 318.6 m in 2018.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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