Topic: The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed.
The supplied tables and charts demonstrate how the police
budget’s
money was spent in one area of Change noun form
budget
the
England Correct article usage
apply
during
2017 to 2018. The table illustrates where the money Change preposition
from
which
came from Correct pronoun usage
apply
three
sections and the chart Change preposition
in three
indicate
the process of its Change the verb form
indicates
distributing
.
Replace the word
distribution
Overall
; the percentage of salaries was nearly the same, while
; the section of
technology Change preposition
on
has been
increased in 2018. Verb problem
apply
It is clear that
; the part of the third one has not changed.
According to
the pie charts; the income of officers and staff were
75 per cent and it has been decreased to 69 in 2018. Change the verb form
was
In addition
; 8 per cent of money
was spent Add an article
the money
for
technology in the first year which Change preposition
on
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
went
up to 14 in 2018; Change the verb form
gone
while
the portion of
building and transport was equal.
The budget of national government and local taxes were respectively 175.5 and 91.2 million in 2017 which had a relative increase and reached Change preposition
for
to
177.8 and 102.3 million. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
; section
of other sources had just a little increase from 38 to 38.5 million. Needless to sayCorrect article usage
the section
that
; the total of resources had been rose during these years from 304.7 to 318.6 m in 2018.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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