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Two pie charts show a comparison of the proportion of people with different degrees and professions who worked in an engineering company in 1980 and 2008

Two pie charts show a comparison of the proportion of people with different degrees and professions who worked in an engineering company in 1980 and 2008
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The charts illustrate the
number
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 of employees who worked in an engineering company with different types of higher education certificates in 1980 and 2008.
Overall
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, as can be seen in the two pie charts the
number
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 of workers with
PHD
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 certificates in different fields has grown over the
last
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 28 years ago
while
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this
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 proportion for
people
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 with
master
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's degrees was the same as it was. On the one hand, in 1980,
people
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 with a
degree
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 in
master
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 of
science
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 and colleagues who had only bachelor's degrees in art and
science
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 had the biggest shares in
this
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 company, about 73% in total. In 2008, the proportion of
people
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 who had a university
degree
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 in
Master
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 of
Science
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, 29%, was still the same as in 1980
while
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 the first
degree
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 in
science
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 and arts faced a dramatic decrease in 2008, 9% and 14% respectively.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 in 1980 did not tend to have
PHD
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 certificates and individuals with a
degree
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 in
PHD
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 of
science
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 and art had the lowest portions in the company
as well as
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people
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 with
Master
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 of Art degrees.
However
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, in 2008, the
number
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 of employees with
PhD
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 in
science
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 experienced a drastic 17% rise from 13% up to 30%.
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 with an arts
phd
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 had tripled and reached 7% in 2008
in addition
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 to a minor increase in
people
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 with a
master
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 of arts, about 1%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, phd, people, master, degree, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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