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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison. L s where relevan

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison. L s where relevan
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The bar graph illustrates the data about the number of six different social network
sites
 pupil usage in Canada between 2024 to 2015.
Overall
, one site
uses
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used
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 presented the highest amount in both years
while
 five
apps
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app
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 uses showed
tiny
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a tiny
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 proportion in
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 multiple networking sector.
According to
 the graph, there
was
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were
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 no
sites
 people
was
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accounted
by
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for
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 22% and 21% in 2014 and 2015 .
One
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 site human
was
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recorded
most
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 significant amount by 36% and over
the
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apply
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25% in 2015.There
was
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 similar percentages by 23% and 24% during the time period by two
sites
 uses.
Furthermore
, three
sites
 showed by 12% in 2014 and they increased by 16% in 2015.
However
, four
sites
 and five
sites
percented
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presented
per cent
 the smallest contribution of social network
sites
 by 8% and 8%
in addition
the
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 lowest percentage by 2% and double in 2015 respectively.
To sum up
,
majority
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the majority
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 of one
sites
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site
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 uses multiple social
network
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networks
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was huge
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,
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 and
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a
the
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number of five
sites
uses
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used
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 accounted tiny proportion
usage
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of usage
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 in Canada.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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