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The chart below shows the umber of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. .

The chart below shows the umber of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. .
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The labelled diagram demonstrates the number of households in
US
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the US
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according to
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 their annual salaries in 2007,2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, the number of families in all categories increased over time except the category of residents who got
the
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a
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 yearly income between 50000 and 74000. In 2007,people who got
the
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a
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 salary
less
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of less
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 than 25000 was 25
million
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.
Then
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,it plunged to just below 30
million
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 and fell to 27
million
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 in 2015.The same pattern of
this
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 graph was followed by the category of residents who earned between 25000 and 49999,but both of them did not have the same number.The families who earned from 50000 to 74999 remained stable for all three years. The residents who got from 75000 to 99999 annually,did not exceed 15
million
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 in 2007,2011 and 2015.The households
who
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that
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 earned
highest
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the highest
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 income
ws
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was
 28
million
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 in 2007 and
then
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, it showed a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 pattern by dropping to 28
million
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 in 2011 and jumping to 33
million
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 in 2015.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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