the chart below gives information about the amount of time children spend with their parents.
The chart delineates the comparison of
children
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children's
time
spend
with their parents during weekdays and weekends across Wrong verb form
spent
age
.
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ages
Overall
, kids
spend time
with their parent
between 8-10 Fix the agreement mistake
parents
hours
per day. During weekdays, children were
mostly spend their Unnecessary verb
apply
time
with their Mom. On the other hand
, during weekend
, more Add an article
the weekend
time
were
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was
spend
with both Change the form of the verb
spent
parent
.
Change to a plural noun
parents
In
the weekdays, Change preposition
On
Change preposition
on averagely
averagely
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average
kids
across age
spend at least 5 Fix the agreement mistake
ages
hours
a day with their mother
. Second to that, they tend to spend their Fix the agreement mistake
mothers
time
with both parents with the peak at age
8-9 Years old. However
, at the age
of 4-5, kids
tend to spend their time
with Dad after their mom.
In
the weekends, more Change preposition
At
time
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
spend
with both Change the form of the verb
spent
parent
for more than 5 Change to a plural noun
parents
hours
a day across age
. Fix the agreement mistake
ages
Menawhile
, less Correct your spelling
Meanwhile
time
were spend
with Change the form of the verb
spent
mother
Correct article usage
the mother
averagely
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average
less
than 4 Change preposition
of less
hours
across age
. Fix the agreement mistake
ages
Time
spend
with dad is showing gradual growth as the Wrong verb form
spent
kids
is
a growing but started to Verb problem
apply
slowing
down when the Change the verb
slow
kids
reach
6 years oldWrong verb form
reached
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, age, kids, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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