Some people believe if a police force carries guns, it will encourage the level of violence in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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I disagree with the opinion that
the
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violence in
the
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society
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will be promoted if a
police
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force carries
guns
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,
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since the advantages of carrying
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are more than the
disavantages
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. For the pros of a
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holds
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, the safety of the
society
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will be increased and ensured, decreasing the violent
crimes
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in the
society
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. The
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of
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will strengthen the power of the
police
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, which can prevent
crimes
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effectively as people might
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of being
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by
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if they
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vital
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.
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, if there are
crimes
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that jeopardise the lives of the
residences
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,
such
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as robbing and
gun
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shooting, the
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can utilize the
guns
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to shoot the
criminer
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in order to stop the
crimes
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and
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the lives of the citizens. As time
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, the criminal rate might
declined
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as the power of the
police
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is ensured and strong.
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, there are drawbacks
on
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carrying
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. If both
of
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the
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and the
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have
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, a
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war may be sparked. Innocent citizens who are in the area of the
gun
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war may be shot and get
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under
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chaotic
situations
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, increasing the violence in the
soicety
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. If the
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no
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, the
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can use their professional strategies to catch the
crimners
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criminals

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as
usaul
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, preventing a
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war. Yet, is it
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that the
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without
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can defeat the
criminers
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with
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effectively?
Guns
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is
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a very strong
weapon
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which
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human ability is not enough to fight
with
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it
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without powerful weapons
makes them
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the same
with
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usual
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people. They may easily
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by the
crinmers
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crimes

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with
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and the same
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with the
vulunerable
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citizens.
This
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will only encourage the
crinmers
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crimpers

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to use violent and strong ways to
committe
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commit

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crimes
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as the strength of the
police
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is easily defeated. In conclusion, I believe that
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police
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, an occupation that
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the
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lives and
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the safety of
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society
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should be given certain power. With professional training on the skills and the
enthics
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ethics
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on
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using
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on duty,
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with
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will encourage the calmness and safety of the
soicety
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society

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,
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of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • law enforcement
  • escalate
  • deter
  • overreaction
  • perceived safety
  • misuse of power
  • deterrent effect
  • law and order
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • civil liberties
  • use of lethal force
  • accountability
  • arms race
  • militarization
  • social fabric
  • statistical evidence
  • cultural attitudes
  • criminal behavior
  • policy implications
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