Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Each and every country invests a certain amount of
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inventing something new, so, that they can have an advantage over the other nations.
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conducted in science, business and academics is always considered the most important and critical one.
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information is shared without any conditions. I will discuss both views and will give my opinion about why
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information should not be shared.
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important data should not be shared feel that it may be a threat to
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region where it was conducted.
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shares details about its
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related to making weapons like nuclear bombs,
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needs a lot of finances involved, and a nation will not be able to earn anything back if
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shared freely.
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vaccine involved a lot of
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and effort and once it was made the companies sold it
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a good price and got the invested
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back.
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, if
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valuable data is shared freely,
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all the countries will not have to spend their financial resources on
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as it would be wasteful.
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will be a great aid to third world countries as that
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can be invested in some other important areas.
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, India is a developing country with a high population rate, if the important content is shared by other developed countries like America and Australia,
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India can invest that valuable asset
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other aspects like infrastructure.
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group who has conducted the
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because it involves a lot of hard work and dedication
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a new thing.
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is one of the main reasons that I believe information should not be shared freely. The gist of the matter is that despite having lots of benefits of sharing details of a
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, it should not be shared freely because the negative aspects of
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sharing cannot be snubbed as it will be a threat
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a blessing for researchers and a nation where the
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Task Achievement
Ensure your essay is balanced by discussing both sides of the argument equally before providing your own opinion. This will enhance your task response score.
Coherence & Cohesion
To further improve coherence, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to more clearly connect your ideas and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Enhance your essay by incorporating more specific examples to support your points. Real-world cases and statistics can add depth to your argument.
Language
Readers appreciate variety in language. Try to incorporate a broader vocabulary and avoid repetition of words for a more engaging read.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've done an excellent job structuring your essay with a clear introduction, discussion of both views, and your own opinion in the conclusion.
Task Achievement
You effectively addressed the prompt by discussing both views on the issue and providing your own perspective, which is crucial for task response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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