The diagram shows the consumption of renewable energy in the USA from 1949-2008. Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer identifying the main trends and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the consumption of renewable energy in the USA from

1949-2008.

Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer identifying the main trends

and making comparisons where relevant.
The line chart shows
total
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the total
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amount of four types
renewable
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of renewable
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energy
(Hydroelectric power,
wood
,
biofuels
and
wind
) in
USA
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the USA
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from 1949 to 2008. The data was presented in
quadrillion
Btu
.
Overall
total
energy
from all sources increase more than twice from 1950 to 2000. The highest consumable
energy
is hydroelectric power , followed by
wood
and
biofuels
. The
wind
is the least renewable source that used since 1980.
Hydroelectronic
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Hydroelectric
power and
wood
are the highest consumable
energy
source
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sources
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in the USA
compare
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compared
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with
biofuels
and
wind
. At the beginning of 1950,
total
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the total
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consumption of
the
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apply
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hydroelectric was slightly below
the
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that
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wood
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of wood
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. But in 1960, there was a significant increase
of
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in
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the
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apply
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hydroelectric consumption from 1.7 to 2.7
quadrillion
Btu
,
while
the
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apply
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wood
experienced
decrease
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a decrease
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slighly
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slightly
from 1.8 to 1.5
quadrillion
Btu
. Consumption of
biofuels
and
wind
started
from
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in
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1980 with a small amount below 1
quadrillion
Btu
. In the early
2000
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2000s
,
the
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apply
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biofuels
showed a drastic
grow
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growth
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with total
energy
almost
reach
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reaching
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1.8
quadrillion
Btu
. Opposite to the
biofules
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biofuels
, the
wind
only showed a little increase with total
energy
around 1
quadrillion
Btu
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, wood, biofuels, wind, quadrillion, btu with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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