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The graph below shows theh number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows theh number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given chart illustrates how the number of
tourists
 having a trip to the Caribbean islands during a 7-year
period
 from 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the total of
tourists
 coming to the Caribbean
island
 saw an upward trend. Meanwhile, the number of visitors staying on
a cruise ships
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a cruise ship
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 was lower than on
island
 ones but
then
 it beat the visitors on the
island
 to finish the whole
period
 in a higher position. In 2010, the number of
tourists
 staying on the
island
 at about 0,7
million
people
 , and it remained stable for about one year. In 2011, it suddenly increased by nearly 1,5
million
people
then
 remained unchanged until 2015. Surprisingly, it mildly fluctuated to finish the whole
period
 at 1,5
million
people
, ranked second.
By contrast
, the amount of
tourists
 staying on cruises was just 0,25
million
people
 at the first time of the
period
 but
then
 it fluctuated for 2 years to 2012. Suddenly, it
was
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tremendously went up to 2
million
people
to
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by
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 the end of the
period
 in 2017, ranked first.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, period, island, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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