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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the amount of
visitors
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 visiting a Caribbean
island
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 and their preference for accommodation from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
number
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the number
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 of
visitors
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in
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to
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 Caribbean
Island
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 increased steadily throughout the 7-year period. Between the two accommodations, expenditure on staying on cruise ships rose significantly over the years but fluctuated in staying on the
island
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. Despite
this
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, the total amount of
visitors
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 that flowed into staying on the
island
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 was higher
thanon
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than on
acruise
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a cruise
cruise
. Accommodation on the
island
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 received over five hundred
visitors
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 between 2010 and 2011, which
then
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 rose to approximately 1. 5
million
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 in 2013 and has not changed until 2016. After remaining constant, there was a slight drop in 2016 before rose back to 1. 5
million
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 again in 2017. In 2010,
visitors
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 that stayed on the cruise reached just less than five hundred
visitors
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, eventually the numbers rose to five hundred
visitors
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 in 2011 and
then
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 fell back to 2010 levels in 2012. Following 2012 there was a significant resurgence that reached a high point of 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2017. In conclusion, the total number of tourists that come to the Caribbean
Island
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 has a stable growth from 2010 until 2017 and has not collapsed.
Therefore
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, 2016 and 2017 were the only
year's
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years
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 cruise levels of
visitors
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 exceeded the
island
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's, with values over 2
million
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 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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