The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according

to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.
This
table
is defining
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defines
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social
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the social
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and economic indexes of
countries
such
as
Canada
,
Japan
,
Peru
and
Zaire
. In
this
table, the first row
is trying
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tries
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to compare
annual
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the annual
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average
income
in these 4
countries
which
has
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have
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been
showed
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showing
shown
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in USD. It shows that the highest annual
income
belong
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belongs
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to
japanese
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Japanese
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people
and naturally
this
higher salary will bring
better
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a better
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quality
of
life
among
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to
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these
countries
. The second highest
income
belongs to
Canada
which is lower than
Japan
but still much higher than 2 other
countries
. Unfortunately
due to
economic issues in
countries
such
as
Peru
and
Zaire
, the amount of annual salary in USD is much lower than 1
month
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month's
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income
of
people
in
Japan
and
Canada
.
Due to
better
quality
of
life
in
Japan
and
Canada
, they have longer
life
expectancy rather than
Peru
and
Zaire
. The reason
of
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for
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lower
life
expectancy in
2
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the 2
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above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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countries
depend
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depends
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on other factors like weather
quality
, food
quallity
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quality
and level of stress. Among the 4
countries
, Canadian
people
are receiving the
hight
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highest
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amount of
calorie
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calories
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per day.
Japan
has
highest
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the highest
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daily calories after
Canada
and the lowest rate belongs to
Zaire
. Unlike
low
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the low
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rate of adult literacy in
Zaire
and
Peru
, the rate in
Canada
and
Japan
is almost 100
percent
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per cent
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. It's interesting that both
countries
have only 1
percent
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per cent
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illiterate
people
in
the
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apply
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society.
According to
the above comparison, we can find out that
Japan
and
Canada
are among developed
countries
in the world and that's why the
quality
of social and economic are high and acceptable.
This
comparison
also
shows that 2 other
countries
are among undeveloped
countries
and
as a
result
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result,
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they have lower
quality
in
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of
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life
.
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