The line graph below shows how many people practised sports in Australia.

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the

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number of

players

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in 4 different types of sports (baseball, tennis, badminton,

rugby

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) over

twenty-year

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a twenty-year

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period from 1985 to 2005.

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, it is

vivid

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clear

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that badminton and basketball when the same till the end of the period.

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rugby

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was the most popular,

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contrast

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contrast,

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it declined sharply by the end of the year . Turning to the details, in 1985 the number of

rugby

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players

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was 250000.The figure for

rugby

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went down slightly till 1995 by 50000, but

then

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the index decreased sharply to 50000 in 2005.The second,the most popular type of sport (tennis) In 1985 included 150000 sportsmen,

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the rate increased slowly until 2005 to approximately 225000. Turning to other details, in 1985 the indicator of basketball

players

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was above 70000 and it was stable throughout the entire period. The figure for badminton included 50000

players

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from 1985 to 2005.

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