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The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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According to
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this
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 data, the expenditure
of
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 tobacco/food/drink in Turkey was the highest data with 32,14%, respectively Ireland with 28.91%.Looking at the
overall
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 structure, it is readily apparent that the most purchased point among
five
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 countries was observed by food/drink/tobacco, followed by clothing/footwear at the
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leisure/education items were shown the least figure on outlay. Italy,Spain and Sweden stayed
same
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average
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 with 16.26%, 18.80%,
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and 15.77
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%.
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, clothing/footwear payments in Italy were the most outgoings with 9.00% than other countries which
remanied
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remained
 at more or less
same
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 (6.43%,6.51%,6,63% and 5.40%).
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, the
last
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 category was shown just below 5% by all of
countries
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. Spain had the lowest on spending their leisure at 1.98%,
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 was true for Turkey with 4.35%. At approximately 2%, the remaining categories have a similar value as the consumer record.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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