Some people say in order to prevent illness and diseases, governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that governments should relieve housing problems and environmental pollution to reduce sickness and disease.

While

there are some solutions that may work more effectively

such

as vaccination, I contend that

this

is the most suitable way to tackle the circumstance as these are the main factors to cause diseases. First of all, one factor

can be

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clean

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that

people

and

nature

are

relate

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rigorous

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,

human's

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life

depend

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on

nature

and

have

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impact

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on them.

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, we need oxygen to

breath

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and if the air

are

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polluted, we may have some health

problem

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problems

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such

as cough, cold,infectious

disease

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diseases

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and so on, so that protect

environment

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the environment

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become important.

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,

people

eat food from

nature

,

most

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common are meat,

plant

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plants

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, water,... the artificial food are very expensive so that food

come

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from

nature

still be used largely, when the habitat

are

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polluted,

these animal

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and

plant

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also

be

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sicked and decrease the product's quality.

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when we use

this

resource, our health will be affected critically. Have the circumstances that one location

are be

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treat

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on

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radiation and all of

animals

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the animals

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in

this

place are changing

genetic

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, the most serious thing that these animals can be

ate

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and

this

site

become

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death

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area.

The society

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usually

think

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that reducing pollution is the best choice for the world but

on

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the

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contrast side, it

also

have

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some

restrict

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. The

easily

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problem

to see

that

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the budget of any

goverment

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government

are

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not enough to solve the

environment

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environmental

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problem

completely,

this

side

require

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a large number of

people

and time but in

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era, it is impossible.

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,

natural

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can

recure

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without

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the action

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action

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actions

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of

people

. Our activities can make the habitat

become

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worse if

it

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it is

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not clear.

Consequently

for

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this

problem

is that the environment can not return to the well status.

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, reducing

enviroment

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environmental

environment

pollution and housing gases will

be improved

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human's

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health.Despite

have

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some downside, it will be

outweight

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outweighed

by the positive effect.