in the future the main reason for going to the shoping mall will be entertainment not to shop. do you agree or disagree
People
will to want to the malls will be leisure activity instead
of buying,completely agree that this
kind of opinions
Fix the agreement mistake
opinion
are
true and we will see to decrease the sell in shopping malls.
there are several Correct subject-verb agreement
is
rensons
, why Correct your spelling
reasons
i
would agree Change the capitalization
I
against
Change preposition
that
people
go
more for fun than shopping.
Wrong verb form
going
Fistly
,in the past when Correct your spelling
Firstly
member
of Fix the agreement mistake
members
family
wanted to Add an article
the family
went
together Change the verb
go
in
the shopping Change preposition
to
mall
just for bought , it was possible that they be
hungry or childs were tired and they might not wanted to do it Wrong verb form
were
becuase
Correct your spelling
because
mall
Correct article usage
the mall
were
for jast Correct subject-verb agreement
was
shop
and didn not have any entertainment place for they.
Replace the word
shopping
For example
, when i
was Change the capitalization
I
child
did not like Add an article
a child
went
to Change the form of the verb
going
mall
for buy Add an article
the mall
i
liked to Change the capitalization
I
went
to a park and Change the verb
go
i
Change the capitalization
I
plaied
there.
Correct your spelling
played
placed
Secondly
, Many people
preffer
to buy from Correct your spelling
prefer
shop
online Fix the agreement mistake
shops
although
it has many problem
but they have Change to a plural noun
problems
convinent
Correct your spelling
convenient
choice
and they Fix the agreement mistake
choices
dont
need to go Correct your spelling
don't
the
shopping Change preposition
to the
mall
.
Finally
, I believe shopping mall
in the future Fix the agreement mistake
malls
is
very attractive Wrong verb form
will be
becuase
they will have many entertainment Correct your spelling
because
centers
Change the spelling
centres
such
as cinemas, boling
alleys, Correct your spelling
bowling
restaurantes
, Correct your spelling
restaurants
even
we could Correct word choice
and even
to
see plants and trees or Change the verb form
apply
an
art exhibition.
In conclusion, in the future Add a missing verb
have an
people
preffer
will go to malls for leisure Correct your spelling
prefer
activity
Fix the agreement mistake
activities
insted
Correct your spelling
instead
they
will go to buy.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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