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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
#uk #commuters #car #bus #train
The given line graph compares how many average
UK
 commuters
travelling
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 per day by three different types of transport over the 60-year period.
Overall
, cars
was
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were
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 by far the most popular transport in the
UK
,
while
 the
UK
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number of
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commuter
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commuters
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 by taking
bus
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the bus
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 decreased over the 60-year period. In 1970, it is noticeable that the number of
UK
 commuters travelling by car stood at 5
million
 per day,
while
train
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the train
a train
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 was
far
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 the least popular transport, at
appromixately
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approximately
 2
million
people
 per day. Over the following 30 years, the figure for
train
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trains
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wnet
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went
 up consistently before reaching a plateau of 3
million
 which lasted from 2000 to 2010, and
then
 the figure reaching
to
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5
million
 in 2030. In 2030, the figure for
people
 using cars reached 9
million
, which was triple the number of
people
 taking the bus. Meanwhile, the number of
people
 taking the bus decreased to just under 3
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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