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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays researchers and
travelers
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 are able to visit far environmental
sightseeing
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 like the South Pole.
Pros
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 and cons of
this
 phenomenon will be discussed in the essay. I believe that the investigation of remote locations provides the following benefits. First of all, it is considered that missions to the South Pole help to understand
the
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climate change issues and ways to prevent the ecological disaster.
For instance
,
according to
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overall
 increased level of water in
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nature, which, eventually, affects undersea habitats and creates floods. Because of
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,
the
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global warming should have been studied in a more efficient way by
physical
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 observing the place.
In addition
 to it,
travelers
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 could arrange
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 trips in order to save endangered species of local
animals
. It is highly crucial to preserve
biological
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 diversity of
animals
 in their natural surroundings.
On the contrary
, there are not only conscious people who would like to reach remote destinations. Some of them might impose a danger in terms of pollution and stressing the
animals
. Since
the
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civilizations
has
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began to spread around the globe, more and more nature is being polluted with different
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 of garbage.
Due to
this
, the
animals
 and environment might suffer severe repercussions of
human's
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 actions.
Moreover
, illegal hunting and fishing are another threat
for
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 the wild inhabitants.
To sum up
, there are plenty of benefits and drawbacks of visiting far distant places. In spite of positive
outcome
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 like studying and helping
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others, people might want to make a profit
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 it and become a danger to the natural surroundings.
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