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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificial intelligence robots. What is your opinion?

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The climate line graph illustrates how the weather has been changing every month over a year in Kolkata.
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it is clear that
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 both temperature and precipitation levels were fluctuating dramatically during the whole period. Rain is considered to pour the most in the summer season,
while
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 the hottest weather
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 in May.
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 with, there was a steady temperature growth from 20
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 in January to over 30
degrees
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 in May. Afterwards, it had a downward trend till the end of the period.
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,
degrees
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 slightly fell to merely 25
degrees
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 in October.
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, it was almost 20
degrees
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 Celsius in December. As per the
raining
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 in Kolkata, it is shown that first 5
moths
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months
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 there had been less than 100
mm
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 per month.
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, in the next 3 months, from June to September, the city experienced the severest rainfalls, when it reached the top of almost 350
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 in July. Followingly, the quantities reduced drastically to 150
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 in October. The lowest point of merely 0
mm
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 was reached in December.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Automation
  • Workplace automation
  • Human intuition
  • Job displacement
  • Collaborative robots (Cobots)
  • Skill adaptation
  • Ethical considerations
  • Economic implications
  • Fully automated workforce
  • Human-machine collaboration
  • Technological advancements
  • Creative industries
  • Empathy
  • Socio-economic impact
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