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The graph below shows trends in the USA meat and poultry consumption

The graph below shows trends in the USA meat and poultry consumption
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The chart compares
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price
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the price
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 of US meat and poultry consumption between 1955 and 2012
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, the four types of meat experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the
price
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 of pork and turkey
which
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stayed stable, the
cost
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 of beef and broiler changed with some fluctuations. In 1955 the
price
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 of beef was around 60
pounds
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 and
this
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cost
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 increased sharply to 90 in 1976. In
this
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 year the barter of pork dropped to 40. The appraisal of broiler was 15
pounds
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 in 1961 and
this
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price
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 rose significantly till 2009. Pork and turkey’s
cost
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 was changed slowly from 1961 to 2012. Between 1955
to
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and
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 2012 park’s
price
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 converted from 50
pounds
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 to 40.
Turkey
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cost
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 transformed from 5
pounds
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 to 10 between 1961 and 2012.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, cost, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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