In many countries, traditional dress and costumes are considered effective way of maintaining links with the past. How effective can traditional costumer be, in this sense? What other ways exit to help citizens connect with a country’s past?

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Each
country
has
special
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ancient dress, and
this
outfit can represent the
culture
and history of
people
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the people
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in that
country
. In my perspective
customs
are one of
significant
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the significant
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item
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items
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to convey
history
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the history
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and
culture
of
specific
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a specific
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county
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country
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, there are a number of procedures to transmit heritage to new
generation
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. In
this
essay, a brief explanation of
this
approach and some possible
alternative
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will be explained.
To begin
with, traditional clothes undoubtedly serve as
powerful
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means to connect with
past
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the past
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. In my
country
, Iran, each province has its own particular attire and these
customs
provide much information about the region, they can indicate the conditions of the city, describe the type of climate, or transmit various
detail
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details
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about rituals specific to that area.
For instance
, some parts of Iran have special attire for brides and grooms, and even guests wear these
garment
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garments
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to celebrate the wedding party. I
further
believe that
customs
are just
accessory
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accessories
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in
this
situation, and not enough, For
handed
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handing
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down heritage to other
generation
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generations
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we should consider all
aspect
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aspects
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of ancient
culture
. A case in point is,
folklore
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that folklore
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music
play
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plays
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noticeable
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a noticeable
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role in each
ceremonies
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.
For example
, my
country
has
own
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its own
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specific
music
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instrument
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instruments
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like
Tar
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the Tar
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or Setar for
play
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classical
music
that
related
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is related
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to the past. In my opinion,
music
can easily convey
culture
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the culture
a culture
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of nations to citizens. In conclusion, it is so valuable to dress
customs
in some
ceremony
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ceremonies
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but
for
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preserve cultural traditions we can pay attention to other issues. Authorities with
help
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the help
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of citizens
to
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apply
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can keep
up
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traditions alive.
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