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You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter, tell your friend about the party ask for the recipe explain ntwhy you need the recipe from his/her coury

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Hello June, Recently, I was thinking about throwing a
get together
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party
to
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for
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 my school friends.
This
 is a holiday month and
perfect
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 time to throw a
party
 so that all of us have the time to join. I was thinking of having foreign cuisine at the
party
 as one of my friends loves to try new tastes.
That is
 why, I am writing
this
 to you for the recipe of your special Chicken Kebab. It is your country's delicacy and your special ingredients
makes
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 it a perfect item to have
in
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 my
party
. So being my only friend in Iran, will you please send me your special recipe for Chicken Kebab? I will be more than happy and thankful to have
this
 dish cooked with your special touch. I would like to video call you
while
 cooking so that I will not mess anything up. With Love, Rahul
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Task Achievement
To elevate your letter further, consider adding more specific details about the party, such as the theme or the number of guests, to add depth to your reason for choosing a foreign recipe.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter flows well, but using a wider variety of connectors and transition phrases could enhance the coherence even further.
Task Response
You’ve done a great job of clearly explaining the reason for your party and why you’re interested in your friend’s specific recipe, which directly addresses the task.
Coherence & Cohesion
The structure of your letter is well-organized, with clear paragraphs for introducing the party, asking for the recipe, and explaining why you want it. This organization greatly aids the letter's readability and coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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