Nowdays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organisation why might be the case ? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed ?
These days majoratiyvof people
selected
to be safe working more than Verb problem
prefer
work
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working
fore
a Correct your spelling
for
company
or organisation. It has many problems working with company
and safe Add an article
the company
a company
work
also
have many cons Starting safe work
. In this
essay
I will discuss both views.
On the one hand, I believe that if someone Add a comma
essay,
works
for self-occupation it can be more cons. Because they can do it more freely. That no one judge
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judges
theme
. Correct article usage
the theme
For example
, my sister was a she is very graduated but she still has not taken a ggavvernant job. she did her own business. She has a beauty salon in the home. She did it very freely. Also
my brother Sumida he
has not had a good education but he opened the garage and he earns money without any rolls
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apply
On the other hand
, if someone works
with a company
or organization he. Had to work
for that and have to agree to all roles. link they have to come on time to work
and if they want to take Holliday they have to inform us before. For instance
, my cousin's sister here works
for the Department of Education. Her husband is very sick but here can take a holiday for only three days. Therefore
, I realize working for a company
is
more problems Verb problem
creates
our
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in our
life
.
In conclusion, these days people are addicted to safe occupations because they can Fix the agreement mistake
lives
work
very easily and someone who works
with a company
who
can Correct pronoun usage
apply
work
with to their own lows.Submitted by ma.ushamanu1024 on
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