Nowdays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organisation why might be the case ? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed ?

These days majoratiyvof people
selected
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to be safe working more than
work
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working
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fore
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for
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a
company
or organisation. It has many problems working with
company
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the company
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and safe
work
also
have many cons Starting safe
work
. In
this
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I will discuss both views. On the one hand, I believe that if someone
works
for self-occupation it can be more cons. Because they can do it more freely. That no one
judge
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theme
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.
For example
, my sister was a she is very graduated but she still has not taken a ggavvernant job. she did her own business. She has a beauty salon in the home. She did it very freely.
Also
my brother Sumida
he
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has not had a good education but he opened the garage and he earns money without any rolls
On the other hand
, if someone
works
with a
company
or organization he. Had to
work
for that and have to agree to all roles. link they have to come on time to
work
and if they want to take Holliday they have to inform us before.
For instance
, my cousin's sister here
works
for the Department of Education. Her husband is very sick but here can take a holiday for only three days.
Therefore
, I realize working for a
company
is
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more problems
our
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life
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. In conclusion, these days people are addicted to safe occupations because they can
work
very easily and someone who
works
with a
company
who
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can
work
with to their own lows.
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