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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays,
people
 who live in another
country
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face
very
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 crucial issue
is
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that
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language
.so I agree Misunderstanding
people
 who don’t speak your native
language
 , you may have many serious problems
as well as
 practical problems.
People
 sometimes have to in live another foreign
country
, for a lot of reasons
such
 as finding a suitable job, appropriate education and their life,
therefore
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foreign
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language
 is very serious. For
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you want to do a very simple daily activity like shopping , it isn’t easy for you if you don’t know their accent. Imagine that you are in the company of colleagues and you should present your assignment, You can’t convey information if you don’t choose the proper words. Communicating with
neighbors
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 and local
people
 turns into a problem, so you can't make friends .
Hence
, the consequences of
this
 issue are a loss of being social and becoming lonely if you don't understand a foreign
language
 very well.
In addition
, adapting yourself to another
country
's culture is a really challenging situation . Every society has a particular culture and manner and sometimes you need to communicate with them,
hence
 one of the best procedures to reconcile with their civilization and manner is to figure out their
language
. In summary, we cannot deny that if we go to another
country
 in order to for immigration, or business trip or spend our vacation, we should know about the
language
 of the destination
country
. Because not comprehending their
language
 causes many matters , the most important of which is the problem of communicating with others.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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The author provides relevant reasons and examples, which show a good understanding of the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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