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iThe chart below shows the umber of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

iThe chart below shows the umber of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#ithe #households #income #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The graph shows data
of
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on
show examples
 the
number
 of
household
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households
show examples
 in
US
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the US
show examples
 by their annual
income
 in 2007,2011 and 2015.
Overall
,what stands out from the graph is that there
were
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was
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 the least
number
 of
house hold
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household
show examples
income
 is 75000$ to 99999$ , in
first
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the first
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 place was 100000 or more in
usually
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usual
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 time.in the whole ,another
number
 between two numbers. In terms of less than 25000 started at 25
milliones
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million
 in 2007
then
dramateclly
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dramatically
 rose to 28
million
in2011
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in 2011
 next decreased to 24
million
in2015
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in 2015
, 25000-49999 was
same
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the same
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 trend but it started at 27 in 2007 and finished at 28
million
 in
the
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apply
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end,50000-74999
income
 in all of the trends is less
number
 than all of them except 75000-99999 annual
income
,25000-49999 the next popular and it more
number
thwn
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then
than
 100000or more in 2011, in 2015 100000or more is most popular another
numbers
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number
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 and another one is alike in
another trends
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another trend
other trends
show examples
, less than 25000$ almost
staied
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stayed
 at 25
million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, income, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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