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the graph below shows the quantities of goods exported from Russia to several countries between 1975 to 2010 by different modes of transport.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods exported from Russia to several countries between 1975 to 2010 by different modes of transport.
→ the shown line chart represents millions of
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tones
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 of
goods
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 exported from Russia to numerous nations by four different
transport
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 methods between the
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year
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years
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 1975 and 2010. →
overall
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, the most and the least used
transport
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 modes over 35 years of span is by water and by air respectively. →
Firstly
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, it is seen clearly in the graph that, waterways
is
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 the most used
transport
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 method for exporting
goods
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. In 1975, about 90
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million
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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is
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 exported by waterways and
then
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 its
amount
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 increased for one
year
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 and decreased for
other
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another
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year
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.
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,
ofter
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after
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 1985 the number of
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amount
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 swelled drastically and attained its peak in 2010
approximately
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at approximately
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 130
million
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tones
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tonnes
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.
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, in
case
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 of
roadways
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 it started as 60
million
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tones
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 and for several years its
amount
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 fluctuated between 60 to 80
million
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tones
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 and
lastly
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,
this
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numbers
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number
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 went above 80
million
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tones
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 in 2010. Apart from these, the
goods
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 exported via railway dropped
down
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in
amount
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 from 1975 to 1995 and afterwards, the
quantity
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number
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 of
goods
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 rose
up
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significantly till 2010
as
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to
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 almost 60
million
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tones
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tonnes
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.
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,
airway
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the airway
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 was the least used
transport
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 mode for all given years. In 1975, less than 20
million
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tonnes
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tones
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was
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 transported through
this
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 mode reaching
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up to
upto
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up to
 40
million
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tonnes
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tones
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 in
final
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the final
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year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tones, goods, transport, year, amount, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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