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the graph below shows the quantities of goods exported from Russia to several countries between 1975 to 2010 by different modes of transport.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods exported from Russia to several countries between 1975 to 2010 by different modes of transport.
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→ the shown line chart represents millions of
tones
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tonnes
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 of
goods
 exported from Russia to numerous nations by four different
transport
 methods between the
year
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years
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 1975 and 2010. →
overall
, the most and the least used
transport
 modes over 35 years of span is by water and by air respectively. →
Firstly
, it is seen clearly in the graph that, waterways
is
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 the most used
transport
 method for exporting
goods
. In 1975, about 90
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million
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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tones
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 of
goods
is
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 exported by waterways and
then
 its
amount
 increased for one
year
 and decreased for
other
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year
.
Finally
,
ofter
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after
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 1985 the number of
amount
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 swelled drastically and attained its peak in 2010
approximately
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at approximately
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 130
million
tones
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tonnes
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.
Further
, in
case
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 of
roadways
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roadways,
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 it started as 60
million
tones
 and for several years its
amount
 fluctuated between 60 to 80
million
tones
 and
lastly
,
this
numbers
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number
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 went above 80
million
tones
 in 2010. Apart from these, the
goods
 exported via railway dropped
down
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apply
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in
amount
 from 1975 to 1995 and afterwards, the
quantity
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number
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 of
goods
 rose
up
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apply
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significantly till 2010
as
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to
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 almost 60
million
tones
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tonnes
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.
Moreover
,
airway
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the airway
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 was the least used
transport
 mode for all given years. In 1975, less than 20
million
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tonnes
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tones
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was
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 transported through
this
 mode reaching
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up to
upto
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up to
 40
million
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tonnes
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tones
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 in
final
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the final
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year
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tones, goods, transport, year, amount, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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