The pie chart below illustrates number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students and junior lecturers at an Australian University

The pie chart below illustrates number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students and junior lecturers at an Australian University
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by British University
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undergraduate
,
postgraduate
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and the total student population in the library.
Overall
,
majority
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the majority
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of postgraduate
students
refere
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read
more than 15
articles
in the library per
week
whereas
the
majority
of undergraduates and
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student population read 1-7 papers per
week
. In detail, a massive
majority
80% of PhD
students
, and a modest minority 12% of all
students
read 1-7
articles
per
week
whereas
a modest 24 % of junior lecturers
refere
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read
the same number of
articles
at the same time.
Furthermore
, a
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vast
majority
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% of all
students
refere
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refer
6-11 papers per
week
while
tiny
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minority of both
phd
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PhD
students
(1%) and junior
lectures
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lecturers
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( 5%)
refere
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prefer
refer
the same amount of papers at that time.
Moreover
,
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75% of PhD
students
read more than 12
articles
per
week
while
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modest 15% in junior lecturers and
modest
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a modest
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21% in all
students
.
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