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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
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The given chart compares how many average UK commuters per day travelling by three types of
transports
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transport
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 from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the number of UK
people
traveling
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travelling
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 by car and
train
 both
increase
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increased
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 over
60-year
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a 60-year
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 period,
while
people
 taking
train
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the train
a train
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 to travel saw a slight decrease. It is noticeable that
car
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the car
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is by
Verb problem
was
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 the most popular transport in 1970,
stood
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standing
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 at approximately 5
million
people
 and
people
 driving
the
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a
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 car in
UK
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the UK
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 experienced a significant rise, about 7
million
people
 in 2000, and
then
 it is expected to reach 9
million
people
 in 2030. The figure for
people
 who
taking
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take
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bus
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the bus
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 gradually
decrease
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decreases
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 from 4
million
 in 1970 to just above 3
million
 in 2020, and the prediction of it will
continue
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continue to
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 decrease in 2030.
By contrast
, the number of
people
 taking
train
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the train
a train
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 was by far the least popular transport in 1970, just under 3
million
, and
then
 the
users
Correct quantifier usage
number of users
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 of
train
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the train
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 were a slight rise to 3
million
 in 2000, surpassing the
bus
Correct quantifier usage
number of bus
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 users after 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, train, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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