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The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries

The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries
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The chart provides the information about use of
water
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 during a year by industrial companies in different countries.
To begin
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 with, the given graph includes two opposite types of liquid,
such
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 as
ground
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groundwater
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water
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 and
water
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 used for public supply.
Although
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first
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the first
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 element has higher numbers,
second
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the second
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 one is
also
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 irrepressible.
On the contrary
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, the colossal proportion of 430 million
of
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apply
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cubic meters have chemicals,
the
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and the
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 lowest place was divided
by
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into
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 three industries: machinery, fuel and textiles.
The
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A
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 massive percentage of
public
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the public
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 supply
also
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 belongs to chemicals.
Second
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 highest position of 190 cubic meters in the same field
have
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has
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 food and drinks.
However
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, fuel is one of
essentials
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the essentials
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 nowadays, its place overtook paper with the point of 190.
Same
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The same
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 can be said about textiles, which percentage is 80
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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ground
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groundwater
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water
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 and only 10 for the
water
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 for
public
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the public
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. Machinery has the smallest number of ground liquid and the medium of second supply.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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