Professionals such as doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree?
Should
professinals
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professionals
such
as doctors
, nurses
and teachers
get a higher salary than the ones working in the sports and entertainment branches? Of course
both of these Add a comma
course,
type
of occupations Change to a plural noun
types
is
important in different ways, but to Correct subject-verb agreement
are
me
it is given. I do agree that the professions involved in the Add a comma
me,
well being
of our Add a hyphen
well-being
society
should be paid more. But some people may ask why?
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Firstly
, doctors
, nurses
and teachers
are professions that can change lifes
. Correct your spelling
lives
For instance
, doctors
and Change noun form
doctors'
doctor's
nurses
work can be a matter of life or Change noun form
nurses'
nurse's
dead
. Our whole Replace the word
death
society
depend
on that we have educated Change the verb form
depends
residences
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residents
that
can help us when we get Correct pronoun usage
who
indjured
. And with that said, the Correct your spelling
injured
affect
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effect
teachers
have on us is huge. The work they put in influence
all our Fix the agreement mistake
influences
cilitizen
and they deserve a high salary.
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citizens
citizen
Secondly
, without the work of doctors
and nurses
the Add a comma
nurses,
sport
industry would not even be functional. Change the noun form
sports
For example
, athleates
are often Correct your spelling
athletes
hurted
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hurt
from
their Change preposition
by
ocupation
. If we would not have Correct your spelling
occupation
a
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apply
well developed
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well-developed
hospitalities
all the people in Replace the word
hospitals
brasches
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branches
such
as,
sports would never be able to recover from their Remove the comma
apply
indjury
. Our whole Correct your spelling
injury
society
is depended
on Replace the word
dependent
a
good working healthcare and it should be a självklarhet that they should earn more Remove the article
apply
then
others.
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than
To conclude
, our society
is depended
on Replace the word
dependent
ocupations
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occupations
such
as,
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apply
nurses
, doctors
and teachers
. Without them
we would not be educated or Add a comma
them,
healty
. A well functional Correct your spelling
healthy
healtcare
is not only the source of a good sports team, but a Correct your spelling
healthcare
well being
humanity. It should be given that the ones working with our health should earn more money.Add a hyphen
well-being
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