Professionals such as doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree?

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professionals

such

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doctors

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nurses

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and

teachers

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get a higher salary than the ones working in the sports and entertainment branches? Of

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both of these

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of occupations

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important in different ways, but to

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it is given. I do agree that the professions involved in the

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of our

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should be paid more. But some people may ask why

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Firstly

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doctors

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nurses

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and

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are professions that can change

lifes

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lives

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doctors

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and

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nurses

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work can be a matter of life or

dead

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. Our whole

society

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depend

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on that we have educated

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that

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can help us when we get

indjured

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injured

. And with that said, the

affect

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effect

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teachers

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have on us is huge. The work they put in

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all our

cilitizen

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citizens

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and they deserve a high salary.

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, without the work of

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and

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nurses

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the

sport

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industry would not even be functional.

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athleates

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athletes

are often

hurted

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their

ocupation

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occupation

. If we would not have

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apply

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well developed

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hospitalities

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all the people in

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branches

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sports would never be able to recover from their

indjury

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injury

. Our whole

society

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depended

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dependent

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good working healthcare and it should be a självklarhet that they should earn more

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then

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others.

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, our

society

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depended

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dependent

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ocupations

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occupations

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apply

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nurses

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doctors

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and

teachers

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. Without

them

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we would not be educated or

healty

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healthy

. A well functional

healtcare

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healthcare

is not only the source of a good sports team, but a

well being

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humanity. It should be given that the ones working with our health should earn more money.

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