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The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperature mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariso where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperature mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariso where relevant.
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The
diagram
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 illustrated below depicts the divergence in temperature districts between tropical
mountains
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 and temperate ones. The data in
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diagram
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the diagram
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 is measured in both meters and feet. The
diagram
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 clearly indicates that tropical
mountains
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 are much higher than temperate ones.
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Also
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 it is seen that temperate
mountains
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posses
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 more limits and do not have some of
zones
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the zones
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 that tropical
mountains
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 have.
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However
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 they
also
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 have some common things
for instance
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the
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both massive
mountains
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 have permanent snow
zone
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zones
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 and Alpine meadows. The forest and Alpine
meadows
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meadow
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 zones are proportionally uplifted. As it
was mentions
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 earlier, Tropical
mountains
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 are higher than temperate
mountains
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. The peak of tropical
mountains
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 is approximately 5000 meters which is 19000 feet,
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nonetheless
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 the highest point at temperate
mountains
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 is about 3000 meters, in feet it is 11000. The
diagram
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 illustrates that the snow line usually comes before
permanent
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the permanent
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 snow zone.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words diagram, mountains with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
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