the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison.

the charts below give information on the ages of  the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison.
What has been depicted in the pie charts is
age
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the age
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distribution in
Yemen
and Italy in 2000,
along with
future projections for 2050.
Overall
, in 2000, the largest proportion of
population
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the population
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was allocated to the
group
of
people
aged 15 to 59,
while
that of
people
in
this
group
is likely to decrease in Italy as time advanced. In 2000, senior citizens made up more than 5 per cent of
the
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Yemen
's total
population
,
while
they constituted almost a quarter of the
italian
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Italian
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population
.
Also
,
although
14.3% of
population
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the population
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was allocated to the
group
of
people
aged 15 to 59, the figure for
this
group
was about half.
Whilethe
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While the
age of 15 to 59 accounted for 46.3 %
in
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Yemen
,
while
this
group
represented below slightly half of
Yemen
’s inhabitants. In 2050, it is predicted that the percentage of
population
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the population
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aged below 14 will decrease to 37 % in
Yemen
, compared to only
three
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a three
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percent
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per cent
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drop in Italian.
While
senior citizens are expected almost
doubled
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in Italy, they are likely to increase by a mere two
percent
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per cent
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in
Yemen
.
Moreover
,
although
the
group
of
people
aged 15 to 59 is predicted to grow in
Yemen
, it will decline by almost
two- third
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two-third
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in Italy.
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