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the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison.

the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison.
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What has been depicted in the pie charts is
age
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the age
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 distribution in
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000,
along with
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 future projections for 2050.
Overall
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, in 2000, the largest proportion of
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population
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the population
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 was allocated to the
group
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 of
people
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 aged 15 to 59,
while
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 that of
people
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 in
this
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group
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 is likely to decrease in Italy as time advanced. In 2000, senior citizens made up more than 5 per cent of
the
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apply
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Yemen
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's total
population
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,
while
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 they constituted almost a quarter of the
italian
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Italian
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population
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.
Also
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,
although
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 14.3% of
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population
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the population
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 was allocated to the
group
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 of
people
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 aged 15 to 59, the figure for
this
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group
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 was about half.
Whilethe
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While the
 age of 15 to 59 accounted for 46.3 %
in
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of
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Yemen
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,
while
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this
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group
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 represented below slightly half of
Yemen
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’s inhabitants. In 2050, it is predicted that the percentage of
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population
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the population
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 aged below 14 will decrease to 37 % in
Yemen
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, compared to only
three
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a three
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percent
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per cent
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 drop in Italian.
While
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 senior citizens are expected almost
doubled
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double
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 in Italy, they are likely to increase by a mere two
percent
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per cent
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 in
Yemen
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.
Moreover
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,
although
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 the
group
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 of
people
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 aged 15 to 59 is predicted to grow in
Yemen
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, it will decline by almost
two- third
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two-third
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 in Italy.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, population, group, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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