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The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows information about the
pollution
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 levels in the
air
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 caused by
electricity
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 generation, transport, and industry in four countries, namely China, America, Japan, and
Australia
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, in 2012.
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,
industries
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 are the largest source of
pollution
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. Meanwhile,
electricity
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 was the smallest, except in
Australia
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. In China, the
air
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pollution
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 caused by
industries
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 reached 80
ppm
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, which is the highest level of
pollution
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 caused by
industries
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 in the period. Followed by transport and
electricity
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, reaching 70
ppm
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 and around 60
ppm
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, respectively. In America, the highest
pollution
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 source was transportation,
that
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which
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 reached slightly under 60
ppm
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, followed by
electricity
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 generation and industry around 30
ppm
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. In Japan, the largest amount of
air
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pollution
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 was caused by
industries
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, same as in China, but at different levels (in Japan, slightly over 40
ppm
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). Followed by transport (30
ppm
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) and
electricity
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 (around 15
ppm
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). Meanwhile, in
Australia
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, the amount of
air
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pollution
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 caused by industry,
electricity
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, and transportation
were
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was
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 under 20
ppm
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.
In addition
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, in
Australia
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, the
pollution
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 caused by
electricity
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 was the largest amount.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, air, electricity, australia, industries, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollutants
  • Industrialization
  • Regulations
  • Geographical factors
  • Emissions
  • Air quality
  • Carbon dioxide (CO2)
  • Particulate matter (PM)
  • Nitrogen oxides (NOx)
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Comparative analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
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