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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they do not have to pay taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the contemporary world, tax payers
plays
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an
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 crucial role in the advancement of the economy , but some individual believes in not
to pay
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paying
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taxes
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 to the government.I partly agree with
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 assertion and
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 essay will acknowledge the validity of
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 statement and elaborates on my reason . On one hand , people pay different kinds of
taxes
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 every day
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,
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toll
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tolls
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, salary , goods and
service
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services
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as well as
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 trade . All
this
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are
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 taken by the authorities and
spend
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spent
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 on
develop
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 of infrastructure, welfare schemes, free education ,
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and pension
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pension
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pensions
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to
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 the old citizens .
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 , Sydney road transport
charge
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charges
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fee
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a fee
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 on car registration and road tax for using
motor ways
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motorways
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.All
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 money will spent on laying new roads and widening existing
one
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.
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 to that, all
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 helps to commute easily
everyday
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.
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 ,
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 ,there are some people
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do not want to pay
taxes
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 because of their low standard of living
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middle class
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middle-class
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 and
lower class
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 families. But many rich
prople
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people
 are not actually paying
taxes
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 all over the world ,investing smarty in exemption business
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 buying properties .
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 ,In India super rich people are buying land in rural area where
government
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the government
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 want to develop the area
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 they are getting
exemption
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an exemption
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 .
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This
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 facilities
are not choose
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are not choosing
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buy
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by
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 normal citizens
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 less purchasing power ended up paying huge duties . In conclusion,
government
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 should frame
a
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apply
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policies that
benefits
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for
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both salary earners
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 wealthy individuals. They should collect lesser
taxes
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 from lower income groups and higher from the rich .
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 will help them grow balanced,
in
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 return it
boost
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economy
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the economy
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 .

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supported main points
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logical structure
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coherence cohesion
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complete response
Consider revising your essay to cover the topic more completely by discussing a wider range of perspectives and more deeply analyzing the reasons behind viewpoints.
relevant specific examples
While presenting examples, ensure they are well-selected and directly support the point being made. Further detail and analysis could enhance their relevance.
task achievement
Consider presenting your opinion more explicitly throughout the essay, integrating it with the discussion of each view. This approach can make your position clearer to the reader.
introduction conclusion present
You effectively introduced the topic and presented a clear thesis statement in your introduction, setting up the foundation of your essay.
logical structure
Your conclusion summarises your views effectively, demonstrating a good understanding of the essay structure.
clear comprehensive ideas
You included examples from practical scenarios, like the Sydney road tax and the situation in India, which help to illustrate your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • redistributive measures
  • income inequality
  • welfare programs
  • mismanagement
  • reinvest
  • economic growth
  • government overreach
  • minimalist state
  • societal decline
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