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The graph below shows UK air pollutants, measured in million tonnes,

The graph below shows UK air pollutants, measured in million tonnes,
#uk #air #pollutants #million #tonnes
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The chart above delineates the total amount of pollutants present in the
air
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 in
UK
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the UK
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according to
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 1900 to 2005 sensus.
Overall
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, the graph illustrates a negative
trend
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 throughout the mentioned years except for
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Transport
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the Transport
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 sector. In the whole line chart, total
air
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 pollutants
constitutes
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constitute
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 the most contributing figure to
the
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apply
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air
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 pollution.
Secondly
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, it was
Industry
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, but in the year 2002, both lines of
transport
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 and
industry
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 intersected and
industry
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 showed a
decline
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declining
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trend
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whereas
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transport
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 depicted a rise in
trend
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. Household was the least contributing figure in the graph.
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Initially
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Initially,
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 in the year 1900,
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industry
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the industry
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 contributed around 6
million
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tonnes
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 of
air
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 pollutants.
However
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,
at the end
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 of
2005
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2005,
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 it seemed to be the second
last
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contributant
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contribution
 of about 2
million
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tonnes
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. On the
otherhand
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other hand
,
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transport
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the transport
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 sector started from 1
million
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tonnes
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 in 1900 and ended up with a rise of 3
million
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tonnes
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. That was almost thrice of
air
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pollutant
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pollutants
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 in 1900. Surprisingly, household
pollutnants
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pollutants
 followed a constant
trend
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 from the year 1900 to 1999 and from there it started decreasing.
In
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At
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 the end of
2005
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2005,
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 it
had
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apply
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reached
to
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apply
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a count of zero.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, trend, transport, industry, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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