The graph below shows UK air pollutants, measured in million tonnes,

The graph below shows UK air pollutants, measured in million tonnes,
The chart above delineates the total amount of pollutants present in the
air
in
UK
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the UK
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according to
1900 to 2005 sensus.
Overall
, the graph illustrates a negative
trend
throughout the mentioned years except for
Transport
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the Transport
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sector. In the whole line chart, total
air
pollutants
constitutes
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the most contributing figure to
the
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apply
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air
pollution.
Secondly
, it was
Industry
, but in the year 2002, both lines of
transport
and
industry
intersected and
industry
showed a
decline
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trend
whereas
transport
depicted a rise in
trend
. Household was the least contributing figure in the graph.
Initially
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Initially,
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in the year 1900,
industry
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the industry
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contributed around 6
million
tonnes
of
air
pollutants.
However
,
at the end
of
2005
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2005,
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it seemed to be the second
last
contributant
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contribution
of about 2
million
tonnes
. On the
otherhand
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other hand
,
transport
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the transport
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sector started from 1
million
tonnes
in 1900 and ended up with a rise of 3
million
tonnes
. That was almost thrice of
air
pollutant
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pollutants
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in 1900. Surprisingly, household
pollutnants
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pollutants
followed a constant
trend
from the year 1900 to 1999 and from there it started decreasing.
In
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the end of
2005
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2005,
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it
had
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reached
to
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apply
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a count of zero.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, trend, transport, industry, million, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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