‘Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for people to use.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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some individuals that
healcare
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healthcare
ought to be provided by
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the goverment
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government
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free for society to utilize. From my perspective furnishing
people
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some drawbacks.
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, there are some rights of
people
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a
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medical
service
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.
That is
every person's life is
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valuable,so it should be kept in shape.
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there are poor individuals in society.
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the
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edge areas haven't got possibility to go away for treatment
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from
city centres.
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, penniless
people
may suffer from
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during
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the
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long time
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if healthcare
are
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made free of charge there will be some
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disagreements
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such
as higher taxes,reduced quality of care and longer
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for treatment. Since the investment of
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government
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inhabitants that
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may face
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poverty. All in all,
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issue should be
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reconsideration
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with as soon as possible.
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Structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Your introduction should introduce the topic and your stance. The body should provide arguments and examples, and the conclusion should summarize your views clearly.
Example Use
Provide clearer, more specific examples to support your arguments. General statements should be supported by concrete evidence or examples to be more persuasive.
Grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity. Minor errors can distract from the message you are trying to convey.
Argument Development
Expand your arguments to fully address the task. Discussing both sides of the argument, as well as your own opinion, adds depth to your essay.
Balance
You effectively addressed both sides of the argument, showcasing an understanding of the topic.
Personal Viewpoint
Your essay communicates a clear stance on the subject, providing a personal viewpoint which is good for task response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal healthcare
  • Commodified
  • Public health standards
  • Economic burden
  • Mixed healthcare system
  • Preventive healthcare
  • Efficiency
  • Quality of care
  • Fundamental human right
  • Government-funded
  • Private sector involvement
  • Healthcare services
  • Education in healthcare
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