You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.

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chart illustrates the ratio of gentlemen working in 1984, 2001 and 2014

according to

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age group.

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, it is clearly apparent, that adult Pipil prefers to work more professionally and throughout the period young teens were discouraged from being workers

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that elder people were opposed to them.

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with, throughout the chart young adults (35 to 44) choose to work in an organisation with a proportion of around 91.

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, the ratio of adult Pipil steadily increased through the period of time, in 1984, 2001 more or less than 40% in 2014 just over a half.

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, young teens ( 15 to 19) avoiding to work in a job and because of that their portion was receding every year. In 1984,2001 just over half with part of around 60% and in 2014 the percentage declined to around 10% and stood at 50%.

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.

You paid for a one month English Language course at a college overseas but you cannot attend. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter Introduce yourself and give details of the course. Explain why you are unable to attend the course. Say what you would like to do

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Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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