Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas.

It is true that in
this
day and age, opinion is divided over whether creators ought to have more privilege to show their plans and thoughts. In
this
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I will look at both sides of
this
debate
as well as
offer my own point of view. Turning first of all to the arguments in
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of
this
idea, it goes without saying that giving more freedom to the creators could create more variety than what the artists have now. At the same time, as more diversity is recognized, the forum for speaking and discussion or expression might allow
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develop. As far as the other side of
this
debate is concerned, it is generally acknowledged that providing excessive liberty may lead to more disdain for the opinions of others.
For example
, the activists from “Just Stop Oil”
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tomato soup at Van Goph’s sunflower. Their political actions have
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a great work of art. It may
also
be worth noting that from the research results from
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, the scientists say that
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a wide range of
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narrows a person's ability to think. By way of conclusion, from the ideas and examples above, it can be seen that there are valid arguments on both sides of
this
debate.
However
, I am of the opinion that, in the grand scheme of things, unbridled liberty might lead to disrespect for others and the destruction of their work. To develop their creativity freedom is needed
although
freedom should be within the rules.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • creativity
  • freedom of expression
  • innovative
  • ethical considerations
  • societal morals
  • unregulated
  • provoke thought
  • controversy
  • government regulation
  • censorship
  • diverse perspectives
  • artistic expression
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