the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012

the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012
The line graph compares the crime in new
part
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city over 9 year period from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, there were three types of crime
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place in 3 different areas: burglary, car theft and robbery.
While
the number of car
theft
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thefts
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and
robbery
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changed with little fluctuation, the figure
of
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burglary
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increased sharply from 3400 to 3700 between 2003 and 2004.
Then
this
line dropped gradually to 12000 in 2008. After
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this
character remained consistent until 2012. There were about 2700 car
theft
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in 2003.
This
symbol plunged significantly to 2000 in 2006 and
finally
rose again to 2800 in 2012. There
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500 rubbery in 2003.
Then
this
indicator rose to 800 in 2005 and
this
figure stayed stable from 2005 to 2012.
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