the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012
The line graph compares the crime in new
part
city over 9 year period from 2003 to 2012.
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parts
Overall
, there were three types of crime took
place in 3 different areas: burglary, car theft and robbery.
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that took
While
the number of car theft
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thefts
robbery
changed with little fluctuation, the figure Fix the agreement mistake
robberies
of
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for
burglary
increased sharply from 3400 to 3700 between 2003 and 2004. Fix the agreement mistake
burglaries
Then
this
line dropped gradually to 12000 in 2008. After that
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that,
this
character remained consistent until 2012.
There were about 2700 car theft
in 2003. Fix the agreement mistake
thefts
This
symbol plunged significantly to 2000 in 2006 and finally
rose again to 2800 in 2012.
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500 rubbery in 2003. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Then
this
indicator rose to 800 in 2005 and this
figure stayed stable from 2005 to 2012.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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