the chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 and 2010

the chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 and 2010
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of overweight Australian people in both genders with ten-year intervals throughout 1980, 1990, 2000 and 2010.
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the graph,
it is clear that
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Australian men encounter obesity problems more than women in Australia.
However
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, the percentage of males seems to decrease in the
last
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period. On the one hand, Most male people, in 1980, started at 40% before a noticeable rise to nearly 48% in 1990. A surge of
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was seen in 2000 by almost 15%
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it slightly dropped to just well over 60% in the
last
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year of record.
On the other hand
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, female individuals in Australia occupied well over 30% in 1980 and
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boosted to roughly 45% in 1990. The number of obese women still escalated to 53% in the year 2000 afterwards it remained constant and ended the period at the same number as in 2000.
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