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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 word

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 word
#minutes #information #world #population #summarise #features #comparisons #word
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The pie charts illustrate the
world
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 expenditure on various items
as well as
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 the
population
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 in some
world
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 regions.
Overall
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, Food and Transport represent the highest shares of
spendings
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spending
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,
while
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 people spend the lowest amount of money on clothing.
In addition
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, Asia accounts for the largest percentage of the
world
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's
population
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. In terms of the
spendings
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spending
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, Food makes up 24% of the total expenditures. Followed by Transport ( 18%). The figure for housing doubles that for clothing at 12% and 6%. And the remaining share( 40%) is contributed to other items. Regarding
Population
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, above half of the people in the
world
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 reside in Asia. America and Europe both rank second with 14% of the total
population
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. Africa closely follows
by
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with
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 4% less share than them.
Other
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The other
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 5% live in
the
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apply
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other parts of the
world
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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