Some people say in order to prevent illness and diseases, government should focus on reducing environment pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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people

who insist that

government

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and local

ministry

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ministries

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should concentrate on

reduce

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diseases

and illness

level

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prevent

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housing issues and environmental pollutants

as well as

pollutions

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. From

this

writer

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viewpoint,

this

writer agrees with

this

statement and will show some evidence for

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concern. Starting

this

concern, it is undeniable that the earth is suffering various types of

pollution

, some can cause vast and disastrous consequences, including global warming which is mostly

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concerned

to increase

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the

level

of

diseases

, as it is a good condition for millions of viruses and bacteria population to rise up, which mainly the origin of

diseases

.

According to

some documents,

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phenomenon mostly is caused by human activities including traffic

emission

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, construction wastes, etc;

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there are some natural causes but

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will not be included in

this

essay. To the main point, the solution, there are plenty

ways

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to reduce

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pollution

as well as

diseases

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disease levels

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level

,

government

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can briefly occupy time and

moneys

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money

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to improve the facilities with the eco-friendly system

to

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all factories and cars,

additionally

, encouraging

people

to help each other is

also

not too complex to be done. Housing issues that the

government

now facing

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a huge concern, too. The evidence that there are not

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estates

placing

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for

people

to construct housing,

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is true because

people

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pollution

and noise

pollution

, reducing the immune systems of the

people

who live around. Though

this

is

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might be a terrible phenomenon, it can be tackled if the

government

know how to deal with it.

For example

, local authorities can construct shared accommodations to reduce the

level

of housing

,

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and should save more

spaces

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to build parks or reinhabit

forest

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forests

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. In conclusion, there is a considerable amount of

people

who insist that

government

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the government

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and local

ministry

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ministries

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should concentrate on

reduce

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reducing

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the

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apply

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diseases

and illness

level

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levels

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by

prevent

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housing issues and environmental pollutants

as well as

pollutions

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, for the solutions, governments can simply invest money

on

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environment friendly

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systems, encouraging peoples, build more shared accommodation and save up place to build parks or reinhabit forest.