The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1998 and 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending on different

commodities and services in a particular European country in 1998 and 2008.
The chart illustrates the percentage of Pipil's lifetime expenditure on various items and services like
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holidays, Clothing, Eating out, Electronic goods, Newspapers/Magazines and Cinema in a specific country
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Europe
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from 1998 to 2008.
Overall
, the highest spending has occurred by European people on electronic goods in both years and the least expenses account for Newspaper and Cinema in both years.
To begin
with, In 1998 Pipil spent on multiple commodities, most spending goods were electronic with 16% of income and clothing with 12% of earnings.
However
, with the time in 2008, these expenditures saw a notable increment of 4% and 6% in clothing.
In addition
, in 1998 spending on holiday was 8% but by that time there was a
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and in 2008 spending occurred to 5% with a dive of 3%.
On the other hand
, expenditure on newspapers/magazines and cinema were similar in 1998 with 3% and in 2008 with a similarity of 1%.
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