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The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the levels of
air
pollutant
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pollutants
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 that happened in four nations
among
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in
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 2012.
Air
pollution
 level is
devided
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divided
by
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into
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 three reasons which are
electricty
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electricity
geneation
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generation
,
transport
, and
industry
. In general, it can clearly be seen that China became the country which had the highest
air
pollution
rate
and
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apply
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followed by America, and
then
 Japan and Australia. In China,
industry
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the industry
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donated
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contributed
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 the biggest
pollution
 of
air
 conditions with its
rate
 is 80 than
transport
 and electric
generation
field
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fields
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 which became the second and third position, respectively. Meanwhile, the highest level for
this
 circumstance in America
are
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 dominated by
transport
 which had
score
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a score
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 just below 60
of
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in
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air
pollution
 level. The electric
generation
 had
slightly
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a slightly
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 higher
rate
 than
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the industry
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industry
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the industry
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 part which
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is
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are
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is
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 about 30 and the
industry
 score is under 30.
Same
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as
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to
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 China, the most sum of
air
pollution
 levels in Japan
caused
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are caused
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 by
industry
 which had
score
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a score
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almost
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of almost
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 60,
then
transport
, and the
last
 is
industry
.
However
, the
rate
 of Japan is less than America. Australia turned
as
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out as
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 the lowest country which had
air
pollution
 scores merely under 20 for all
categorise
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categories
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. The
rate
 for electricity
generation
almost
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is almost
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 20, but the
rate
 of
transport
 and
industry
 which had the same scores are just under
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the electricty
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electricty
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electricity
generation
's
rate
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, transport, industry, rate, generation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollutants
  • Industrialization
  • Regulations
  • Geographical factors
  • Emissions
  • Air quality
  • Carbon dioxide (CO2)
  • Particulate matter (PM)
  • Nitrogen oxides (NOx)
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Comparative analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
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