The chart shows the number of people working in 4 sports sectors in an Australia town in 2015.
The given bar chart depicts the numbers of voluntary and hired
people
working in 4 different sports roles in a town in Australia in 2015
Overall
, it is evident that the number of volunteers in athletic events accounted for the highest in most figures, with the exception for
the role of referees, Change preposition
of
while
the number of people
who are paid to attend to
the match did not have many differences in 4 sectors.
In 2015, the number of voluntary coaches Change preposition
apply
decided
to engage in Correct pronoun usage
who decided
the
sports events in Australian Correct article usage
apply
town
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towns
is
the largest, at 80 Wrong verb form
was
people
. The
similar trend was seen in both figures for voluntary managers and other sections, Correct article usage
A
rougly
40 and 70 Correct your spelling
roughly
people
respectively.
The numbers of hired coachers
, managers and other parts were lower than those of volunteers, approximately 40 Correct your spelling
coaches
people
for each sectors
. Change to a singular noun
sector
However
, the figure for referees saw the opposite trend, while
only 30 voluntary referees took part in this
events
, more than 38 workers were paid to appear in Fix the agreement mistake
event
this
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