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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world today. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is replacing fossil fuels. Is this a positive or negative development?

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 thought of using
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of
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 unrenewable sources has become increasingly common.
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 is because change in lifestyle has taken
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a mammoth
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 dimension. I applaud the efforts being
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made
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 to bring
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 transition.
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 with, many wonderful facets are associated with the phenomenon of replacing fossil
fuels
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such
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 as coal, petroleum and natural gases with
alternatives
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. The
dominat
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dominant
 reason is
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reduction
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the reduction
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 in pollution levels. To be more specific, burning natural
fuels
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 can lead to
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a hike
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 in
production
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the production
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 of toxic gases
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 as carbon monoxide,
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sulfur
 dioxide and carbon dioxide.
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, opting
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alternatives
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for alternatives
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 like CNG and
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lithium
 batteries can significantly reduce pollution and respiratory disease caused by it. It has been observed that
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efficency
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efficiency
 is not compromised by preferring alternative resources to fossil
fuels
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 even though they are cheaper. For
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instance, cars running on battery
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same
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the same
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 mileage as that of
one
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on
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petrol.
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,
alternatives
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 do not burn
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holes
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 in the pocket and are still reliable.
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, despite the merits, There are some people who think that they have
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viewpoint
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. The contributing
factor
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factors
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is
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 time consumption and
availibility
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availability
 of charging spots. To elaborate, recharging a vehicle powered by battery takes longer time,
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then
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than
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 just refilling a petrol tank. Eventually, in populated countries like India and
China
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China,
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 it can be difficult for people to get
place
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 to charge and wait for
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 period of time.
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, neglegance sometimes can cause
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life-threatening
 situations. To exaggerate,
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overcharging
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 or inappropriate
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temperatures
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 to store gases like
compresed
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compressed
 nitrogen cylinders can cause
fire
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a fire
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.
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,
use
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 of
such
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 substitutes needs to be done carefully.
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, I am inclined to believe that using
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alternatives
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 sources will not only be good for the environment but
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 for saving money. I
reiterarte
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reiterate
reiterated
 choosing them over fossil
fuels
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 is a positive development.

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Introduction refinement
To enhance clarity and impact, consider refining your introduction by more directly stating your viewpoint on whether the transition to alternative sources of energy is positive or negative. Assertion with a clear stance would strengthen the essay's focus.
Example Expansion
Expand on your examples with more specific details or data to reinforce your arguments. While a general overview is provided, diving deeper into real-world cases or statistics could enhance the effectiveness of your examples in supporting your stance.
Counter-Argument Depth
While your essay tackles the counter-arguments effectively, ensuring a balanced and nuanced exploration of these perspectives could further enrich your discussion. Consider addressing potential criticisms more thoroughly to fortify your argument.
Language Precision & Grammar
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and the precision of language use. While your essay communicates ideas effectively, occasional errors and somewhat imprecise language choices can distract. Regular practice and review can help refine your language skills.
Structural Coherence
Your essay structurally progresses well, with a logical flow that guides the reader through your argument effectively. This structured approach aids in understanding and engagement.
Effective Conclusion
You presented a comprehensive conclusion that effectively summarizes your viewpoint and reiterates the benefits of alternative energy sources over fossil fuels, reflecting a clear understanding of the essay prompt.
Topic Understanding
You have demonstrated an understanding of the topic by discussing a variety of aspects, from pollution reduction to economic benefits, showing a well-rounded approach to the question.
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