The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following illustration shows the percentages of illiterate
people
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people
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according to
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the regions that they live,
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in and
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their gender.
Overall
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, we can observe the least
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of illiterate
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live in developed
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and the highest
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of them live in South Asia.
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, it is worth mentioning that the
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of illiterate females is higher than males in each mentioned region. In developed
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countries
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the percentage of illiterate males and females is less than 10%, unlike
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in
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South Asia, Arab states,
Sub-Saharan
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and Sub-Saharan
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Africa. In these
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countries
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countries,
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percentages of illiterate
people
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are way higher than 10 percent.
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, in East Asian
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and
Oceania
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Oceania,
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the
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of illiterate men is quite low approximately 7%,
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the percentage of women
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around 20%. The same trend has repeated with Latin American and Caribbean
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, where the percentage of males makes up exactly 10% of the population and around 15% of females are illiterate
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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