The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following illustration shows the percentages of illiterate
people
people
according to
the regions that they live,
and
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in and
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their gender.
Overall
, we can observe the least
number
of illiterate
people
live in developed
countries
and the highest
number
of them live in South Asia.
Also
, it is worth mentioning that the
number
of illiterate females is higher than males in each mentioned region. In developed
countries
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countries,
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the percentage of illiterate males and females is less than 10%, unlike
to
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in
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South Asia, Arab states,
Sub-Saharan
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and Sub-Saharan
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Africa. In these
countries
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countries,
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percentages of illiterate
people
are way higher than 10 percent.
However
, in East Asian
countries
and
Oceania
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Oceania,
show examples
the
number
of illiterate men is quite low approximately 7%,
although
the percentage of women
makes
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is
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around 20%. The same trend has repeated with Latin American and Caribbean
countries
, where the percentage of males makes up exactly 10% of the population and around 15% of females are illiterate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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