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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates Southwest Airport at present and how it is going to be after renovation next year .  
Overall
 , major facilities will be provided. The number of gates
increase
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 from eight to eighteen .
In addition
 to that, doubling the Arrivals entrance and
Dapatures
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Departures
 exit. Right now, there is
check in
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 on
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left hand
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side
 and Cafe on
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right hand
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side
 corner .As going though , security passport control
on
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left
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as well as
 passport control ,
customs
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 on
right
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 .
Further
 short walkway with eight gates. Next year after redevelopment, there will be two entrances with
cafe
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a cafe
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 on
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side
 ,
check in
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replace
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side
 . After passing
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the security , shops will be
on
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 those empty
place
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Cafe
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 and ATM will be
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departure
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the departure
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 area . Sky train will be inside
as well as
 with eighteen gates. Car hire facilities will be given to passengers.
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Introduction and Conclusion
Introduce your essay with a clear summary of the overall changes and conclude with a synthesis or summary of the most significant changes for enhanced clarity.
Grammar
Maintain a consistent tense throughout your description, particularly when discussing future developments.
Vocabulary
Use a wider range of vocabulary to describe changes, such as 'expanded', 'upgraded', or 'enhanced', rather than relying on simpler terms like 'increase' or 'double'.
Comparison
Try to clearly distinguish between current and future layouts by using comparative phrases more effectively, such as 'will be replaced by', 'will be relocated to', or 'is to be expanded to'.
Comparison
Provided a clear comparison between the current and future state of the airport, which helps in visualizing the transformations.
Detail Usage
Made use of specific examples and details to discuss the planned developments, such as the increase in gates and addition of car hire facilities, enhancing task achievement.
Logical Structure
Organized the description logically, moving from the entrance through the airport to the gates, which helps in understanding the layout and planned changes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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