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The charts below show the protein and calorie intake of people in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the protein and calorie intake of people in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the consumption of
protein
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 and
calories
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 between the four nations.
Overall
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, it can be seen that North America has the highest
intake
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.
On the other hand
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,
India
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 has utilized at least compared to other countries. In general, the capability of
protein
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 that comes from animals in most countries is lower than other types except
India
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.
In particular
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,
India
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 and East Africa consume approximately 30% of
protein
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, which is less than half compared to the standard.
Moreover
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, Latin Americans use
meager
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meagre
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 amounts of animal
protein
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 in their meal, which occupies one-third of all proteins they use. On the other sides, North Americans utilize a huge amount of
protein
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 in their meal which takes over 80%, overcoming the ideal
protein
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intake
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. Regarding the average calorie
intake
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 table,
India
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 consumes 2000
calories
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, becoming the most
meager
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meagre
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calories
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 consumed per head.
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, East Africa and Latin America have approximately 2500
calories
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they
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, nearly reaching the ideal
protein
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intake
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.
By contrast
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, North America leads the position with roughly 3500
calories
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, dominating the amount
calorie
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of calorie
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intake
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words protein, calories, intake, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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